[nitrox721]

this is my 1st human charachter in zbrush !! please leave your comments and critiques . i would like to be corrected if anything wrong
Thank you

[Nekranio]

Hi there.

The jaw line seems to be a bit too long. You might want to shorten it and lower the jaw slightly.

The face is kind of long for her to be feminine. Try making it rounder and slightly shorter.

The lips looked stretched. Have the lower lips slide under the upper lip.

Body length wise, I counted 8 heads. It should be about 7 or 7.5 heads.

Nice work though. Keep going!

Edit: The arms seems to be too long too. You might want to shorten the length from the shoulders to the elbows.

[holyxkira]

hi, nice looking model you have there.
I think there is something wrong with the hood at the front part,under the chin where it seems to be floating, it seems to be going against gravity.
The folds on both the hands could be done better.
I think the knee cap should make it slightly more define.
And one last thing; is the model standing or walking, as i can't really tell where the center of gravity is. (how does she balance)
Thanks,cheers!

[nitrox721]

Originally Posted by Nekranio

Hi there.

The jaw line seems to be a bit too long. You might want to shorten it and lower the jaw slightly.

The face is kind of long for her to be feminine. Try making it rounder and slightly shorter.

The lips looked stretched. Have the lower lips slide under the upper lip.

Body length wise, I counted 8 heads. It should be about 7 or 7.5 heads.

Nice work though. Keep going!

Edit: The arms seems to be too long too. You might want to shorten the length from the shoulders to the elbows.

hey thank you so much i'll make the changes

[nitrox721]

Originally Posted by holyxkira

hi, nice looking model you have there.
I think there is something wrong with the hood at the front part,under the chin where it seems to be floating, it seems to be going against gravity.
The folds on both the hands could be done better.
I think the knee cap should make it slightly more define.
And one last thing; is the model standing or walking, as i can't really tell where the center of gravity is. (how does she balance)
Thanks,cheers!

thanks for the comment ! its standing like giving the pose ! i've taken it from an posing image !!

[nitrox721]

here is an image with environment and her sword + cannon blaster actually they hav to be attached by chains but i cant figure out how to attach chains with spline in 3ds max and i am not good with maya so . if any of you colud help me with it !!

please leave your comments and critics

Thank you

[DEDE_pig]

Hi,

Good work.



The head I feel could be smaller.
The chin could be better if it sharp. (Sexy feel)
The hands itself abit long especially the thumb.

[nitrox721]

Originally Posted by DEDE_pig

Hi,

Good work.



The head I feel could be smaller.
The chin could be better if it sharp. (Sexy feel)
The hands itself abit long especially the thumb.

hey thanks mate !! actually i am learning on my own trying the best to get anatomy right !!
thanks for the corrections

[Kaszz-chan]

Love that you did a Black Rock Shooter model ^_^ i feel really nitpicky saying this (and this is considering the other advice given as well) i would make her chest smaller.... thats a BRS trademark... but i think overall its great

[Ginsan]

the model is not bad. it's much better after DEDE_pig's correction.

[nitrox721]

Kaszz-chan - hey yaa i know about it but i wanted to make her like a grown up woman rather than a small girl ! thank you

Ginsan - Thank you