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    Default WIP - needs critique [upd Nov]

    09-26-2011, 05:44 PM

    This is a drawing I've started today and I really want to finish - I'd appreciate any and all critiques and thoughts on my progress

    I squiggle a lot, so the sketch right now isn't very realistic, but I'm really going to work to make it look that way (and definitely lose the pink)
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      09-30-2011, 09:51 PM

      (moved the first wip here so i can update the thumbnail)
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      So...found some time to draw, finally
      I'd really appreciate advice on the colors (and everything else you can think of )

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        10-09-2011, 03:37 PM

        More progress...
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        10-09-2011, 04:41 PM

        hey buddy... i really like the color palette... this might be me being picky but the angle of the cloth on the left side (her right) its bothering me a little... but cant figure out why.... in terms of color i really liek it... maybe try adding some very high saturated accents reds or blues and see how it punches it out.... anyways...cant wait for update!
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          10-19-2011, 01:47 PM

          I think the arm and hand that has a wine draped on it look weird - Is she supposed to be struggling against it, is it drawing her back or is she pulling it with her? The story here isn't totally clear, to me at least
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            10-22-2011, 03:39 AM

            I think you lost a bit of the facial definition in the latest update.
            Similar thing happen to the hair. The rich sienna color bordering the face got replace by the more pastel color, which gave the girl more dreamy look, but less define.
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              10-23-2011, 03:12 PM

              Thank you for the meaningful critiques - you are all right. The dress looks plastic, nothing in the gestures is what I have in my mind and everything has become more and more muddy with every update... well I'm very excited to start reworking stuff and making it right/readable! I hope to be able to post an update soon. Thank you everyone and take care
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                11-20-2011, 08:01 PM

                Well, this is the new update. Probably doesn't look like it, but I repainted a lot of things. Thank you all for the helpful advice - tried to fix things as much as I could. So, it's currently a boring-looking girl with a lot of boring grass, but I hope I can fix that in the future

                As for the story and the pose, I'm trying to make it look like she's gently stroking the grass/grass-like plants while passing through the forest, though I can't seem to get it right - lots of work in the future.
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