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Spiritto · 01:45 PM

HI there!

I started improvising this little fan art during a live stream. And I sorta liked the result, so I decided to make it a finished work.

The problem is that I am kinda stuck right now. I know how to improve some things (cleaning the character and repainting the building crane) But that won't be enough.

I know the background has problems too, but I'm not able to identify them. Could you give a helping hand, please?

irawan · 03-20-2011, 06:06 PM

i would like to say make the character bigger and reduce the effect,
and just kick away the building on the left side.
i hope that help you a bit.

Spiritto · 03-20-2011, 06:10 PM

Yes! definitely.
I will add those ideas to a "corrections sheet" and give it a try tonight on livestream.

JohnSilva · 03-28-2011, 07:05 AM

I think you should crop you canvas, is too wide because the "sides" of the background don't add to the image.
Also the building between the character's legs are disturbing with the silhouette for me i think you should make more foggy/lighter background to contrast with both lightning and character, after all this is all about the Char and lightnight right?

Hope this helps, here's a super fast paintover showing everything i explained above:

Hope it helps!

Spiritto · 04-08-2011, 06:50 PM

I belive you are right. This call for a vertical composition, not an horizontal one. In top of that I think I should try to redraw it, looking at the character from a lower angle to emphatize the "power" show of and add a little bit of "Vertigo" to the scene.

Thnk you very much.

ionic · 04-08-2011, 07:27 PM

Heres my thoughts... unify your color pallet by adusting the color balance... create obvious points of interest with contrast... and pay close attention to light sources

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Cold · 04-09-2011, 05:53 AM

yea i like the pinky version ionic, although the lightning doesnt have to be same colour, it could be light blue - still cutting theough the pink

Spiritto · 04-09-2011, 04:34 PM

Wow! that is really an improvement! I definitely gonna try that.

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Spiritto Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 19 Member Thanks: 3 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	How could I improve this sketch? WIP 03-20-2011, 02:51 PM HI there! I started improvising this little fan art during a live stream. And I sorta liked the result, so I decided to make it a finished work. The problem is that I am kinda stuck right now. I know how to improve some things (cleaning the character and repainting the building crane) But that won't be enough. I know the background has problems too, but I'm not able to identify them. Could you give a helping hand, please? Attached Thumbnails Last edited by Spiritto; 03-21-2011 at 01:45 PM.

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irawan Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 994 Senior Member Thanks: 496 Thanked 861 Times in 568 Posts	03-20-2011, 06:06 PM i would like to say make the character bigger and reduce the effect, and just kick away the building on the left side. i hope that help you a bit.

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Spiritto Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 19 Member Thanks: 3 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	03-20-2011, 06:10 PM Yes! definitely. I will add those ideas to a "corrections sheet" and give it a try tonight on livestream.

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JohnSilva Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 1,053 Moderator My Mood: Thanks: 803 Thanked 424 Times in 353 Posts	03-28-2011, 07:05 AM I think you should crop you canvas, is too wide because the "sides" of the background don't add to the image. Also the building between the character's legs are disturbing with the silhouette for me i think you should make more foggy/lighter background to contrast with both lightning and character, after all this is all about the Char and lightnight right? Hope this helps, here's a super fast paintover showing everything i explained above: Hope it helps! Attached Thumbnails __________________ -Twitter-Facebook JohnSilvaArt@gmail.com Portfolio cghub sketchbook Anatomicae Study Jams - Join us now!!

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Spiritto Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 19 Member Thanks: 3 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	04-08-2011, 06:50 PM I belive you are right. This call for a vertical composition, not an horizontal one. In top of that I think I should try to redraw it, looking at the character from a lower angle to emphatize the "power" show of and add a little bit of "Vertigo" to the scene. Thnk you very much.

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ionic Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 679 Member My Mood: Thanks: 392 Thanked 376 Times in 237 Posts	04-08-2011, 07:27 PM Heres my thoughts... unify your color pallet by adusting the color balance... create obvious points of interest with contrast... and pay close attention to light sources __________________ ionic's sketchbook

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Cold Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 58 Member My Mood: Thanks: 3 Thanked 25 Times in 20 Posts	04-09-2011, 05:53 AM yea i like the pinky version ionic, although the lightning doesnt have to be same colour, it could be light blue - still cutting theough the pink __________________ Folio CA Sketchbook CGHub Gallery

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Spiritto Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 19 Member Thanks: 3 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	04-09-2011, 04:34 PM Wow! that is really an improvement! I definitely gonna try that.

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