[Hyptosis]

I'm new here, but the place looks chock full of talent and I look forward to meeting you guys.

I've been tossing around an idea for this kinda space comic. I was hoping to get some feedback if anyone cared. Specifically on the storytelling and colors. But anything that helps.











This little blue card thing is very important to the story. Like, the entire plot revolves around these cards, so I wanted to make sure to illustrate clearly how they work. Hence the reason I dedicate an entire page to this dude basically pushing a button.

I'm currently reworking page 3, a lot of people seem to have trouble telling what is going on, so I gotta get that fixed. Any advice would be loved though, thanks again.



Also, here is a ref for the alien and how it compares to humans. I wanted them to be more lanky, kinda hunched backed, or arch backed I guess. Like they're shrugging all the time.

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[Hyptosis]

Here is my current work in progress of page 3. Let me know if this reads better, the guys in the foreground on the bottom panel are the aliens.

[ZombieFrog]

in panel with rocket,in the middle.i think it would be better to show top of rocket with motion blur and rocket traces.second panel have no use,if krek shootin at people so its ok to show a rocket as described in panel 3.
next question is,is explosion about to mark end of sequence at this location.so it would be good to make an establishig shot.
panel four:every soldier knows,then u shooting a rocket u must stay in cover untill it makes boom,and after that count one-two,otherways you gonna get many bad metal thingies in your face,maybe lethal injury.rocket is nice.at this short distance it maybe useful to use some grenade.same procedure,show kreks sitting in cover from right side and fire and explosion above their heads,maybe.
by the way,good work!
regards,andreas